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let us recall  the best effects of style
when those who listen know how best to hear
and do not injure those who hold most dear
the hidden blessings of the final mile
rather they wish the urgent to beguile
expecting that the best might engineer
sounds that will please the most discerning ear
and lead once drooping eyes to shine and smile
the age of wonder has no fixed return
but comes upon us as we seem to find
not a changed world but a remarked abode
the home that we have loved for which we yearn
that seemed so hidden for time out of mind
appear before us as we climb the road


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Given 2013-11-12
as we climb the road by *FledgistThe rhyme scheme is a refreshing take on how to rhyme and the message the poet sends bleeds through beautifully in every single line. ( Suggested by Nichrysalis and Featured by GrimFace242 )

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Fledgist Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for all the faves.  I am most touched.
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JoshuaPatrickLee Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2013
Beautiful. 
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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Blueeyes0001 Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
well done! Congrats on the DD!
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mizzmint Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on having your piece featured as one of today's Daily Deviations! :heart:
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LostGryphin Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Congrats on the DD
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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robson666 Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013  Hobbyist
congratulations to the well deserved Daily Deviation  Clap
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here dailylitdeviations.deviantart.…
Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.
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Fledgist Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks to all!
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is absolutely beautiful; I knew when I started watching your work that you were very talented, and this piece is a fine example. :)

Though, I have two points to make, not glaring errors, but it seems that there's an extra space in the first line between "recall" and "the" and while this does not pose much of an issue when reading, it's aesthetically distracting when looking at the poem. The second to last line also appears to have a typo or a missing word: "hidden for time out of mind" — is this meant to be read as "hidden from time out of mind" or "hidden for a time out of mind"

Unless I'm not reading that line correctly?

Very great work sir. I can see myself rereading this and still getting the same feelings I had when I first discovered it.
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Fledgist Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"for" is correct. It's idiomatic in British English.
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